http://kingsnit.blogr.com/allComments/ XML Feed en Tue, 30 Jun 2009 20:00:58 +0200 http://static.blogr.com/tenants/com/modSiteIcon/tdy-dummy-site-icon.icon.jpg http://kingsnit.blogr.com/allComments/ 48 48 http://kingsnit.blogr.com/stories/2009-06-30-The-dreams-between/#8389277 I like the potential of this story and the fight between light and dark. It would make for an interesting topic if ever I find the time. http://kingsnit.blogr.com/stories/2009-06-30-The-dreams-between/comments/8389277/ Tue, 30 Jun 2009 20:00:58 +0200 Kingsnit http://kingsnit.blogr.com/stories/8222835/#8225407 Any input or just bull shiting with me is great, I love to just see things posted on the page really lol. I have done alot of research into the next parts of the series and just looking ahead at what I really WANT to write instead of what should I write. I will deffinately see what I can do about making the page or comment friendly too tho I dont know that they have what I would need to make that happen. http://kingsnit.blogr.com/stories/8222835/comments/8225407/ Tue, 11 Nov 2008 23:17:32 +0100 snit (anonymous) http://kingsnit.blogr.com/stories/8222835/#8223871 Hello! Good to see you put out what you have so far; you have some fertile ideas in there. I'm a bit surprised that you've chosen to write it in first-person too - that one's tough to pull off, but one of my favorite books of all time is written from that perspective so I wish you the best with it :) If you want to take a look at it as a reference, it may help you avoid some of the heavier editing that is usually required with first-person narrative - Mark Twain's "The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn." Excellent book, that one is. There are a couple other examples too, I'm sure you'll find, just Googling. What kinds of feedback are you looking for from people reading this? Under which post in this blog should we put our comments? It may be a good idea to make a specific spot on here *for* these comments - I see you have a Link List category on the left. Is it possible to do that? (I've not tinkered with the mechanics of this site much - just enough to get a color scheme on my own page - though I fancy the layout and am considering putting writings of my own on here.) Arr! http://kingsnit.blogr.com/stories/8222835/comments/8223871/ Sun, 09 Nov 2008 04:40:57 +0100 xeronut http://kingsnit.blogr.com/stories/8196989/#8197444 Hey man! I read through your posts from the beginning and decided this would be a good place to stick some initial feedback. -I like the idea of starting your chapters with journal entries. You'd mentioned that he had a mentor, or an owner/guardian type overseeing him; perhaps an entry from his perspective here and there, a scribbling of thoughts on paper (or parchment, depending on the era in which this part of the story takes place) detailing his impressions, musings, fears in rearing you. Given this is a boy you're writing about, does this master play something of a father figure to him parallel to his role as a mentor or teacher? Maybe these entries could include the kinds of 'does not work well with others' or 'has potential but no direction' anecdotes grade school teachers used to love to jot down on our report cards. :) -From what I've read in your entries thus far, the world you're creating feels Medieval in context. Given this world was discovered as a result of a father-son hiking trip gone awry, Scotland sounds like as decent a place as any to start the story. One suggestion though - it might be a good idea to start formulating a reason as to *why* they were in Scotland in the first place; are they Scottish themselves, or are they foreigners on a pilgrimage? Does the father have a background of some sort, an obsession he's feeding in searching for whatever it is that brought them to those castle ruins? Will this past tie in to the story later on, if indeed there is an ulterior motive to this venture? Keep in mind, also, that by making them Scottish you might want to do some research on languages in the region (slang, figures of speech etc.), basic geography and castle architecture - here are some links I was playing with: http://images.google.com/images?q=scotland+castles&ie=UTF-8&oe=utf-8&rls=org.mozilla:en-US:official&client=firefox-a&um=1&sa=X&oi=image_result_group&resnum=1&ct=title and http://www.castles.org/Chatelaine/list.htm -This world of magic the protagonist(?) ends up in - will it be revisited during the course of this story, or is it a one-shot meant to show the stark differences between fantasy and reality? A duality such as this in fantasy is more often than not used to flex some of the author's literary muscle rather than actually adding to the plot; the ability to write two completely different worlds in the same story and making them both accessible enough to the reader so they hold that very difference in wonder rather than disbelief. The Acts you described in this post - will they be one book or two? Three? I find myself trying to bite off more than I can chew a lot of the time, trying to fit all these (in my mind) good ideas into too small a space, and they end up elbowing each other in the nose vying for a position as the predominant theme of the story. I suppose what I'm getting at is, will this progression have a defined top-middle-bottom, or is the timeline in this journal post subject to a more freeform approach in that 'if it gets done, it gets done'? To be blunt, how strong is your vision of this story? -To bring this fight from a fictional realm of dragons and sorcery into our contemporary world is going to take some research, particularly the Hiroshima namedrop in this post. I think it's a great idea to use alternate scenarios for well-known historical events; though it has been used before - a la Forrest Gump like we spoke about in the car - injecting your characters into history and making them seem like they belong is ripe for creative storytelling (storyretelling? I so made that word up right now). A word of caution though: if this story is something you want other people to read, it might be wise to hold your subject matter with some level of reverence, and show respect to the more sensitive points in time you choose to reimagine (Hiroshima and Nagasaki were no laughing matter, I'm sure you know). Not that I think that by writing about them in a fictional tense would be blatantly or unconditionally disrespectful, but make sure you handle them with the delicacy and attention they deserve. I normally abhor Wikipedia - it's smug and too heavily biased to be credible the majority of the time - but this particular article seems less.. well, smug or heavily biased: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Atomic_bombings_of_Hiroshima_and_Nagasaki I'll post more when more gets written. :) Interesting start, though - keep at it! http://kingsnit.blogr.com/stories/8196989/comments/8197444/ Mon, 06 Oct 2008 15:44:47 +0200 xeronut http://kingsnit.blogr.com/stories/8185082/#8185083 This one is kind of a short mouth out loud of where I am wanting to take the story. http://kingsnit.blogr.com/stories/8185082/comments/8185083/ Thu, 18 Sep 2008 05:53:28 +0200 Kingsnit http://kingsnit.blogr.com/photos/8213815/#8177521 This artist did cover art for my favorite author, its amazing what he has been able to capture. Tho my own visions of what Connovar might have looked like vary amazingly from this view it is still an amazing picture. http://kingsnit.blogr.com/photos/8213815/comments/8177521/ Sat, 06 Sep 2008 16:27:36 +0200 Kingsnit